Do you know KONY 2012? Many people
would know about KONY 2012. Joseph Kony is a bad guy in Uganda. He is a worst
criminal chosen by ICC. He is a leader of LRA, Lord's Resistance Army. He
kidnaps children and he makes boys to kill their parents girl to be comfort
women. But 99% of the people in the world don’t know who Joseph Kony is. So 3
students went to Uganda in 2003. And they met Jacob who was kidnapped by Kony.
Jacob wanted to die. So they made a film and they made the 'Invisible
Children'. KONY 2012 on YouTube, so many people in the world watched that.
Someone say that making criminals become famous is not good. But it is
good.
Primarily, we need more attention. For example, we cannot know
about Dokdo when the media doesn't tell us. Now all Koreans know about Dokdo
and we work hard to protect Dokdo. But what if we didn't know about Dokdo well,
it could be a Japanese territory. So we need the attention from others. For
example, there was a criminal who kidnapped children in city. And police showed
the name and his picture to citizens who lived nearby the accident place
because citizens have to protect themselves from criminals. And get away from
the criminal. It is important. When all people know about him, they will
protect themselves or get away.
Moreover, we can arrest faster when people cooperate. Let's think
about that all the people in the world know about KONY 2012. They would tell
where Kony is because he cannot escape to the area where there is no
human. For example, in Japanese colonial era, Japanese police let people know about Kim Koo who was the criminal at Japanese sight. And he arrested fast. Like this, we should let many people know about criminals.
Last but not least, politicians will help to arrest criminals.
Like KONY 2012, it becomes famous and government and politicians concentrated
on those things. And they sent an army to Uganda. So the club 'Invisible
Children' is working easier with an army. And the army is finding Joseph Kony,
too. They are helping them because the government ordered to do that.
But there is an opposite side. They are saying that 'Criminals
can escape in hard place to find. First action of criminals is to escape or
hide. But if that video or information has gone to all over the world, every
people would know about it. Then they cannot find a safe place to hide themselves.
So we should make criminals become famous.
I strongly agree that we should make criminals famous. There are
three reasons; more attention is needed, arrest them faster, and politicians'
help. And I think Kony should be arrested because he did so many bad things to
children. He should be punished and the children should escape from him. Making
him famous is the best way to arrest him and guarantee children's safety.
This is a great essay. You have written very well with good transitions between paragraphs. You also have strong arguments and say the opposing side and your rebuttal to it. Excellent work!
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